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I writing a story a the moment - not going to be published! Just
a normal story! I thought I would just put up a 2 chapters. It's not great - I know! PLEASE don't put up bad, mean comments about it because
I'm A LOT younger than you think!
But first - since I'm Irish - I'm going to say thanks in Irish :)!
(I should remind you, it might no be great because I'm not great at it!)
Go raibh maith agat do gach duine an oiread sin - ciallaíonn sé go leor chun teacht ar lucht féachana 1000!
Go raibh maith agat as cuidiú liom a fháil ann! : Thanks so much everyone - It means a lot to reach 1000 viewers! Thanks for helping me get there!
The story is called 'Bitter Truth' and is a Not an adults book. It's for kids (10 +)! It combines horror and horses - the best themes for my writing.
Chapter One
Rew White watched the chestnut
colt as he played, chasing his mother around the field. Rew put down her bag
and climbed up onto the wooden post-and-rail fencing to sit down and watch. At
that very moment, the colt turned his head and saw her. He bounded up to her
like a puppy, nickering happily to her and she reached out her hand to stroke
him.
“Hey, Flame,” she whispered to the
colt, noticing how much the colt has grown in the past year. The colt’s name,
Flame, was given to him by Rew because of his glowing chestnut coat. His dam
was almost identical him, the magnificent chestnut mare Flair. Rew and her
family were very horsy. They lived on a stud farm with just over 50 horses! Flair was classically trained in the haute
ecole dressage movements from The Spanish Riding School in Vienna . Then she was abandoned, left alone to
starve. Then when Rew’s dad took her and her sisters on a trip to Austria to see
the riding school, they found the amazing mare and took her back with them.
His sire was a black Dutch
Warmblood named Black Shadow. He was amazing. But he died three months ago and
it hit Rew hard. Every night she would always dream about him, cantering
rider-less in the dark, with fog and mist in the background. Sometimes she
would even imagine him coming back to her. She would often see him waiting for
her in the shadows outside her bedroom window, but by the time she was outside
to meet him he would have disappeared into the night. Her family have tried to
talk to her about it but she doesn’t want to listen. She refuses to believe
that her special horse was gone. Black Shadow was 16.2 hands high and she had
always ridden him, and he was always good to her, even if he was a stallion.
Rew was only eight, and if she had ridden stallions before you wouldn’t think
it. But she had riding talent beyond her dreams. She started to ride at a very
young age and she doesn’t realize she’s such an amazing rider. She was in a day
dream about Black Shadow when she was suddenly shaken out of her fantasy by
someone calling her name.
“Rew! Where are you? It’s almost
dark. Do I have to drag you?” Rew heard the stern tone of her mother’s voice.
She quickly hopped down and grabbed her bag.
Rew was still pretty upset about
moving here, even if it was beautiful.
They were based in Riverside Valley , a rainy little piece of land in the centre of
Ireland
with lovely scenes and lots of ponies! Six months ago they moved out of Ireland and out of Riverside Valley
Rew had loved so many of the
horses they left behind. It was so heart-breaking to give them to her uncle. At
least she knew they would be cared for well.
Black Shadow and Flair were two of
the horses they took with them. Sadly, Black Shadow was effected by the plane
ride and new surroundings so much that Rew thought it might have made him sick.
But the tests hadn’t come back yet and she wasn’t so sure what had happened.
The vet didn’t know either and called every other vet and more people and they
don’t know either.
Rew took one last, longing gaze at
Flame and his dam before walking down the dusty dirt path to their mansion of a
house.
Rew’s mum wasn’t so pleased to see
her daughter coming in so late. “Honey, really? I don’t want you staying with
that mare and colt all day long!”
“Why’d you want me, Mum? I already
had dinner and I’m not that tired…” Her mother shook her head in disbelief.
“Honey, maybe I want to lay eyes
on you for just a minute to make sure you exist! That colt has gotten you
hypnotized!”
Rew decided not to answer. Instead
she slipped past her, heading for the fridge.
Rew had a big family. There was
her parents, Anita and John White, and
her 11-year-old sister Olivia. She also had a15-year-old sister Lauren, and a
16-year-old snobby sister Monica. She had a younger brother Evan, who was four,
and twins with Jack. The oldest was Cherise. Cherise is 27 and moved out last
year. She recently got married and is on a honeymoon in Kenya with her new husband, John
Maybury.
Rew headed for bed. It was a
tiring day.
Chapter Two
The next morning Rew and Olivia
decided to go for a hack in Spring Meadow. Spring Meadow was the pretty little
meadow that bordered the back of their stud farm. At the very edge of the
meadow was Dark Forest Dark Forest Dark Forest
The girls decided to take the twin
Lipizzaner mares Crystal
and Snowbell.
“Here Crystal ! Here Snowbell!” Olivia yelled. The
snow-white mares looked up from their grass. Giving a loud whinny, Crystal galloped up to the
gate with Snowbell following behind at a fast canter.
“Hey, girls,” Rew giggled as the
ponies reached the gate, “Ready to ride?”
“Of course they are!” Olivia
laughed, giving Crystal
a pat, “They never, ever want to a miss riding through the Falls!” The Falls
were a gathering of waterfalls on a bridge that looked amazing. Below it was Seabed Beach
“But I thought we were going
through Spring Meadow…” Rew was confused. Couldn’t her sister make up her mind?
“Oh, I know,” she sighed, “She
just loves a ride through the Falls!”
As the girls tacked up, Olivia
noticed something strange.
“Ohmygosh!” she squealed, “It’s
Kristy!”
Kristy was Olivia’s best friend.
They went to pony club together and they both adore horses.
By the time they had noticed
Kristy, the girls were finished tacking and about to mount up. The girls
grabbed their ponies and rushed down the lane to meet their friend.
“Kristy!” Rew and Olivia said
together. Kristy had been forced to leave their pony club by her posh, rich
parents and forced to have private lessons instead. Kristy had hated the idea
of leaving the pony club behind, but she had to do what her parents’ asked.
“Ohmygosh! It’s you!” The girls
gave Kristy massive hugs.
“I haven’t seen you guys in ages!”
Kristy groaned, “I’ve been miserable without you!” Kristy’s parents were so
uptight about her mixing with people that weren’t as rich or as posh as they
were. The made her switch to a private, expensive school called Kingswood .
“We were just tacking up Snowbell
and Crystal ,”
Rew was telling her, “You can go on Sparky, the dapple grey in the Gelding’s
stables, if you want.”
“I’d love to!” She grinned, “let’s
tack her up!”
After Sparky was tacked up, the
three girls mounted up and set off to Spring Meadow.
“I haven’t seen Sparky in so
long…” Kristy murmured, stroking his neck, “ The last time I saw him he was a
tiny, newborn foal!”
“Wow!” Rew grinned, “You missed a
lot!”
The girls walked up the dirt and
gravel path and through to the entrance to the beautiful meadow.
“Ready, guys?” Olivia gathered up
her reins, “let’s try a canter.”
Olivia kicked Crystal on, cantering up the dusty dirt track
and through the big trees, long plants and brightly coloured flowers with Rew
and Kristy following at her heels.
After five or ten minutes, they
came to the border of Spring Meadow. Olivia pulled Crystal to a halt, and as did Sparky and
Snowbell. Right in front of her was the entrance to Dark Forest
“Why’d we stop?” Kristy asked
“Sorry, Kris, but we can’t go
here,” Rew said, “This is Dark
Forest
“I don’t see what’s so bad about
it,” Kristy sniffed, “Have you guys ever heard of breaking the rules? C’mon,
Liv, surely you can go with me. We’re both 11.”
“Umm…”
“But, Olivia!” Rew objected, “You
can’t! You’ll get killed if Mum and Dad find out. Surely you have some sense?”
Olivia swallowed. “Uhm, sorry,
Kristy. We can’t go there. It’s too dangerous.” Kristy shook her head.
“You guys are unbelievable. Have some fun!
Honestly,” Kristy shook her head, “If I’m the only one that understands the
term ‘fun’ then I should be the only one to go in there.” With that, Kristy
pushed Sparky into a trot, entering the deep, dark woods.
“No! Kristy!” Olivia cried after
her, “Don’t! Come back!”
Olivia didn’t know what to do. She
couldn’t just turn around and leave Kristy alone. Could she?
“Liv…?”
Then the girls heard a scream. It
had to be Kristy!
Thanks for reading! Hope you enjoyed it and if you didn't PLEASE don't write mean comments cause I'm a lot younger than you all think!
